We can create a moment in time by using language that’s right for the moment so for e.g if you were talking about it you would say “I FELT so scared” but if you were talking about you at the moment you would say “I FEEL so scared”.
Mysteeq’s Polyfest Journey
I'm Nervous and scared just waiting for my time to shine.
As I’m walking through the hallway to get to the changing rooms to get
my uniform on Im just thinking about what’s gonna happen
when I'm out on stage performing. I can tell everyone
else was nervous because all I can hear is “Omg, it's almost our
turn to perform I'm scared”.
my uniform on Im just thinking about what’s gonna happen
when I'm out on stage performing. I can tell everyone
else was nervous because all I can hear is “Omg, it's almost our
turn to perform I'm scared”.
As I’m hearing that I'm thinking
the same but worse I’m having the
worst thoughts you could have
just before a performance: What if I
do the actions wrong?
What if I forget what to do on stage?
What if I don’t know the
words to the songs?.
the same but worse I’m having the
worst thoughts you could have
just before a performance: What if I
do the actions wrong?
What if I forget what to do on stage?
What if I don’t know the
words to the songs?.
As I'm lining up to get on stage for my time to shine I'm already
hearing the crowd saying things like
“Omg their uniforms look amazing”
or “What is the color of their top half or bottom half”.
Hearing those things I can taste the sweat coming down my face
into my
mouth because of how nervous I am. I can feel the butterflies
flying around in my stomach as the crowd starts cheering,
I can see other people nervous by how much they’re moving.
hearing the crowd saying things like
“Omg their uniforms look amazing”
or “What is the color of their top half or bottom half”.
Hearing those things I can taste the sweat coming down my face
into my
mouth because of how nervous I am. I can feel the butterflies
flying around in my stomach as the crowd starts cheering,
I can see other people nervous by how much they’re moving.
As the leaders start to sing,
I’m beginning to become more nervous and
more nervous by the second.
As I'm going out the corridors towards the
stage I'm starting to think about the things that
can go wrong:What if We don’t sing loud enough,
We can’t remember what order our items go into,
what actions we have to do.
I’m beginning to become more nervous and
more nervous by the second.
As I'm going out the corridors towards the
stage I'm starting to think about the things that
can go wrong:What if We don’t sing loud enough,
We can’t remember what order our items go into,
what actions we have to do.
FLASH goes the light shining on me like the sun on a hot day.
I’m already on stage, there’s no backing out of it now, as I’m
performing I see that my parents and family are cheering me on,
I hear the crowd cheering for us as we’re performing,
I feel the sweat still coming down my face,
I’m thinking to myself this isn't as bad as
I thought it was going to be.
I’m already on stage, there’s no backing out of it now, as I’m
performing I see that my parents and family are cheering me on,
I hear the crowd cheering for us as we’re performing,
I feel the sweat still coming down my face,
I’m thinking to myself this isn't as bad as
I thought it was going to be.
As it’s the end of my performance I'm thinking
“that's the best thing I've ever participated in, in my whole life”
and I'm happy I made up for all the things I was feeling and
thinking at the start.
“that's the best thing I've ever participated in, in my whole life”
and I'm happy I made up for all the things I was feeling and
thinking at the start.
Reflection:
I am good at making the reader reflect on what they do or feel when
I asked myself those questions like “what if I do the actions wrong?”
or “what if I forget the words to the song?”.
I asked myself those questions like “what if I do the actions wrong?”
or “what if I forget the words to the song?”.
I am also good at using similes, precise words
(nervous, participated) to sound like an expert,
and dialogue to help my reader feel like they’re
there.
(nervous, participated) to sound like an expert,
and dialogue to help my reader feel like they’re
there.
I need to work on proofreading carefully so that I can make
sure that there are capital letters and full-stops in between every sentence.
sure that there are capital letters and full-stops in between every sentence.
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